This was a very enjoyable read. Interesting concept and setting; I especially like the escalation of the house's description from unsettling to surreal. Your writing has quite a classic vibe to it, and while the ending felt a little over-explained it was a good twist. Great work, really glad I gave it a go.
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Blank Books is a short horror story set in the rural England of 1931.
A strange letter from a friend, an ominous house,
and a library full of blank books.
Something powerful is lurking in the shadows,
binding your life to an unknown destiny.
You can feel it, something's wrong with this building.
But in there, nothing is what it seems...
Written by Andrea Pignataro.
Proof-read by en-no.
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I really liked the story, and the way you write, I loved the concept of Phil living once again his forgotten memories, and, though I have my critique, it was a really pleasant experience and I much liked it. What I didn't like that much may be just really a preference of mine, but it is towards the ending, I found it a bit too self explanatory.
I really loved finding out about Phil being the secret lover of Catherine, and that Jack dying was a mere doll, but I loved finding out about those things, when it was clearly stated in the ending it made me lose a bit of that amusement — it doesn't make the book bad or anything, the entire piece was too good to be ruined by such detail, but idk, what amuses me in books is to read them and feel like I've understood them, through getting immersed into the story, so when the story is very exposing about itself, idk, just feels like a summary of itself within itself, if that makes any sense.
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Nonetheless, you write very well and I look forward to reading more of your work! I don't demand you to change your style based on my preferences (no one can even ask such thing, it's your work and it should be about you and your likes, not mine or someone else's), but just wanted to let you know. Hope you saw this as something positive, because the experience really was for me, have a nice time, a keep up with your work, it's great!
Thank you for your kind words! I've really appreciated your feedback. 👍
And yes, I totally understand what you mean. I guess that's because I've always been told my games' endings were a bit too obscure and even hermeneutic at times. So, the narrative of my latest works (Blank Books included) often finds its closures on safer and clearer shores made of "final explanations".
I'll surely keep in mind your suggestion for my next work, where I'll try to avoid exposing it too much in its final moments.
Thanks again! I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it. 😊